I liked the sound. I don't think it needs another part. If anything I would introduce a few more random elements about 2/3 of the way in, perhaps around the time the major chord comes in... because at that point, I became optimistic that I might get out of here alive, but OH MY GOD FLESH EATING ZOMBIES (doesn't have to be that dramatic though).
At one point I listened to a lot of Patrick O'Hearn, who (yeah OK he was in Missing Persons) did a lot of electronic New Age/ambient type things and he'd put in these sounds like thunder a mile away. I don't know what it was, but he'd put a ton of reverb on it and sort of put it in the background.
I'd like to hear some small development/variations in the drum part and background sounds, because yes it is a little too predictable. And that could consist of either adding things or dropping them out. Setting up a repetitive pattern for awhile can lull the unsuspecting - so drop one of the sounds, or keep it in and just change what the sound is, or... all of the above. In such a spare piece, making little changes can add a lot to the interest.
The percussion dropping out suddenly towards the end was a bit jarring - try a fade.
Finally, if we could have a pterodactyl flying by right before the end, well that would just seal the deal for me.
I did not focus on the bass part and so it couldn't have been that bad. Sometimes a supporting part just needs to stay that way and not try too hard to draw attention to itself.
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